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学生应不应该穿名牌 Name-Brand Clothes or School Uniform?

2021-10-10 18:27分类:高二英语 阅读:

 

某英文杂志正在就“学生应不应该穿名牌”进行调查,请你写一篇文章向该杂志社投稿谈谈你的想法。

写作要求:

1) 针对社会现象陈述存在的不同观点;

2) 提出自己的观点,并解释原因。

词数:150左右。

分析:

1. 本次写作任务涉及到对某种现象的争议,需要作者表达自己的观点,属于议论文的范畴。一般来说,对于一种社会现象,都会有反对和赞成两种观点。一般而言,作者在引出论题后,首先应陈述存在的两种截然不同的观点,即赞成和反对两种观点,继而明确自己的立场,是赞成还是反对这种社会现象,然后阐明持有这种观点的原因,在文章的最后,要简单扼要地概括自己的观点,结束全文的写作。在这种思路的指引下写出来的文章才能思路清晰,结构完整。

2. 具体到本次写作任务,作者可以遵循以上思路将文章分为以下几部分来完成:第一部分,引出话题,阐明“学生穿名牌”这种社会现象的存在,以及人们普遍持有的两种截然不同的观点,即赞成学生穿名牌和反对学生穿名牌,并简要谈谈赞成及反对的原因。第二部分,也是文章的重点,应明确表明自己的立场,是赞成还是反对学生穿名牌,继而,应将第二部分的大部分篇幅用在阐明自己持有这种观点的原因上,如果是赞成,可以从以下几个方面阐明原因:爱美之心,人皆有之,名牌服装一般质量比较好,款式比较多,穿名牌服装可以增强自信;很多名牌衣装打折处理,也可以买到物美价廉的商品;穿名牌衣物和学习之间没有必然联系;人靠衣妆,三分人才七分打扮,穿着打扮显示一个人的修养。如果反对也可以列出反对的原因,如,很多学生不明白名牌的实质,买名牌只是出于一种虚荣和攀比心理;名牌衣装价格比较贵,加重学生家长的负担,导致学生过分重视着装,甚至忽视学习;高中阶段最重要的任务是学习,而不是注重着装等。第三部分,是文章的结尾,需要作者概括自己的观点,将文章收尾。

初稿:

Name-brand clothes are popular with students, but also controversial.

Some people think students should not be allowed to wear name-brand clothes to school because they should be paying attention to their studies there, but not their clothing. Others, however, think that students have a right to express themselves, including in the way they dress, and that this freedom allows them to cultivate their tastes and their sense of beauty.

Name-brand clothes are very expensive. I think a good reason for not allowing them to be worn is that they add to the financial burdens of parents. It’s also true that they’re distracting, and that they encourage vanity and other immorality. My opinion is that students should not be allowed to wear name-brand clothes to school.

初稿点评:

初稿基本上包含了此类文章应具备的三部分,即开头、主体和结尾,但是,文章第三部分虽然为自己的观点提出了理由,却没有在开头首先明确自己的立场,即使后面的理由很充分,也容易使读者读起来一头雾水,不到最后都无法确认作者持有的观点,而且文章中的论据稍显单薄,不足以让人信服。结尾仅用一句话收尾显得有些唐突。

成稿:

As living standards improve, it’s not surprising to see many students wearing name-brand clothes. This has led to a hot discussion.

Some people think it’s natural for students to wear name-brand clothes as long as they can afford them. Others, however, think that the task of students is to study, not to be concerned about their looks.

In my opinion, name-brand clothes are inappropriate for students. First, they’re expensive, and students don’t have the money to buy them. Secondly, they’re likely to lead to students paying too much attention to their clothing, and neglecting the studies to which they should devote themselves. Last but not least, too much emphasis on clothing will probably lead to competition among the students, which would be bad for their values.

In short, students should study hard now, and wait until they’re older to start being concerned about things like clothing.

成稿点评:

成稿结构完整,思路明确,段落清晰。第一部分引出话题,并陈述大家普遍持有的两种截然不同的观点。第三段开门见山地提出自己的观点,将文章引入对其中一种观点的陈述,继而列出持有这种观点的原因,从经济、学生的身心健康成长和价值观方面论述原因,观点合情合理,论据充分有力。第四段紧承第三段,对第三段做了一个简单的概括,从而结束全文。

Powerful Sentences:

1. Every coin has two sides.

2. It’s my firm belief that the students should not wear name-brand clothes.

3. Name-brand clothes are likely to distract students from their studies.

4. Too much attention to their clothing will make them feel vain, and be bad for their morals.

5. Overemphasis on name-brand clothing is not in line with traditional virtue.

巩固练习:

你校正在举办一场英语辩论赛,谈谈竞选课代表应不应该以该学科的考试分数作为评选的唯一标准。请你就此写一篇文章参与辩论。

要求:语言连贯,语法正确。

词数:150左右。

参考范文:

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